Thursday, September 12, 2013

A Hunger Fight



Authors Notes
 1. I want the reader to realize that you should never give up on what you are doing.
2. what works well is that the characters fit together perfectly. it was easy to find the setting and put them together.
3. NO PROBLEMS.
4.NO.




A Hunger Fight

    “Punch. Punch. Jab. Jab. Hook. Hook. Kick. Kick. Nice work, Alfred. The only thing you need to work on is your cardio. You can’t win if you can’t stay in the ring longer than your opponent,” said the workout instructor.
I started going to the gym about a week ago trying to clean up my life a bit. Around the same time, a girl named Katniss started coming to the same gym for workout sessions. Some of my gym partners have said that she has the hardest punch in the gym. I think they are right because I saw her on the punching bag and she almost hit the bag off the chains.
“Hey, Alfred,” said Katniss.
“Hi,” I replied.
“So what are you doing after your workout?” said Katniss.
“Well, I think I am going to work on some more boxing moves. Later, I might just see what’s happening around my neighborhood,” I said.

It was 3:50 in the afternoon when I ran into my friend Katniss. “So how did you find out about the gym?” asked Katniss.
“My friend James told me about it, but my other friend Major broke into a grocery store where I was working and he told me he was bringing the money back to the gym.”
“Wow! That’s an interesting reason. I guess whatever way you found out about it works. If that never happened, we wouldn’t be here right now talking about it,” said Katniss.
“My big fight is on Tuesday. You should come,” I said.
“Yeah, that sounds great. I’ll be there,” Katniss replied.

I was so happy when Tuesday finally arrived. “Today’s the big day,” I said to Katniss.
“Yeah, I know. I’m excited for you! Good Luck, I’ll be cheering for you the entire time,” said Katniss.
            The boxing ring was lit up by lights that felt as if they were blasting heat on the fighters and spectators. The first time I ever fought, I knocked my opponent in the second round. I guess he didn’t like that because tonight we are having a rematch. This time it is for the Championship Belt.
The referees gave the signal and the fight began. I got a few punches in first but then my opponent gave a few back. Katniss was worried about me now because I was bleeding. Then I gave my opponent a right hook and knocked him out for a second time. “I am the champion!” I yelled. I can hear everyone chanting my name as I am given my belt.
           
After I got cleaned up from the fight, I went to meet Katniss. As we are talking I saw a tear fall down Katniss’ cheek. “What’s wrong? Why are you crying?” I ask her.
“I have to go in the Hunger Games and risk my life. There’s a chance I may never see you again,” she replied.
   
   

1 comment:

  1. Hi Kyle! What a great way to start off your story. Leading with a conversation, especially one as memorable as “Punch. Punch. Jab. Jab. Hook. Hook. Kick. Kick” will definitely hook your reader. I also like your unique choice of writing in the first person. It established your main character right away and brought readers into Alfred’s mind in a very intimate way. If you were to expand your story, I would have liked to hear more about who Alfred and Katniss are as people. You did a good job of establishing them as fighters, but I wish I could have learned a little bit more about what makes them tick. Keep up the great work!

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